Otis
The Past of Gold
Bang!!! Steve woke up as Steve slowly got dressed and looked at the Saturday morning sky and noticed it was his brother Jack who was making that noise again, the same thing that wakes him up every morning. The football hits the wall of the house every morning and the banging sound wakes up Steve. He went down to the old garden his brother scoring rapid goals as his sister Bella was reading a magazine trying to get peace and quiet. At that moment his brother hit him with a ball. Just then he was falling and at the corner of his eye he saw a hole where he had been standing on. His brother ran to the hole. Bella moaned. “I’m on the last page then I will come with you!”
As his brother shot down the hole and Bella lagging behind to get to him they were all scared of what they would find. Then finally Bella got down and saw the two of them and walked over to where they were. She asks “Where are we ?”
Jack replies “I don’t know.”
They walked forward and saw gold and ran to it. But then whatever they were walking on turned and pushed them into a zooming line. As they landed on the sand they saw pyramids.
Just at the same time they found themselves inside a battle field, but it changed quickly as Ten gold bars came insight. A portal opened right by them. Egyptian guards came running out after them and grabbed the gold bars. But then seven of the Guards fell over. As the portal was closing they grabbed the gold and ran through the portal. It was closing fast, could they get through in time? It was a little hole but they got into it as the hard grip on his legs faded They stuffed their bags with the gold.
They landed back in their bedroom. Steve said it was over but is it said an echo in his head?
By Otis
Wow Oti...I love your use of expressive vocabulary and the way your story makes you want to keep reading. What inspired this? Do you plan to follow it up with another instalment?
ReplyDeleteWe are amazed that you have such a wonderful imagination that you can construct such interesting and captivating stories. We feel so proud that at the age of 8 you have so much command over the language and without help your originality of thoughts shines through. Really well done Otis, you are as good as David Walliams. Margaret and Santosh Mathur (Nanny and Grandad, England)
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